I always dream about an ideal life f
or mebut I realize it may not come to be
I'm just a woman in love and in need
to want to marry him, the one I love indeed
To live with him for the rest of my life
not just for two years or five
I've found my true love finally
the man who loves and wants me
I know he cares very much about me
HE, my husband to be
I know I am important to him
but he has his priorities
I am not on the top of his list
but to him...this I CAN'T insist
What are his intentions towards me
I have asked him repeatedly
''You know darling...to be with you.." he tells me
but will he some day REALLY marry me?
He said that I have to wait
at least not four years but eight!
but he my darling tends to forget
by that time my womanhood is near death!
I have my hopes for an ideal life with him
But in eight years...who knows maybe ten
when he finally wants me then
how can I go to him
with my youth and spirit so dim?
Alas! This life is not ideal
you may ask what's the big deal?
But to have loved deeply...
and yet not to have him completely
what a tragedy
my life is to me...
-SHF-
9 comments:
What a sad poem. "Womanhood near death"...are you talking about menopause here Neneps?
It's so sad when lovers cannot consummate their love in marriage.
Sad.
Clementine
Oh Neneps. Give a happy ending to this poem please.
What a tragedy.
Sad Face
Perhaps the guy is married and he just wants to keep this woman as his mistress. They always give excuses...believe me. He may love her but he knows that marriage is out of the question. He's not worth it.
Sonia (Mumbai,India)
The guy's hiding something. Wait for eight years? Whom does he think he is? That long? He's not serious. If he really loves and wants this woman, he'll go for her. He's not that into her, I can see that.
She should be his priority. What the hell is he telling her?
Jason (Xanadu,Utah,USA)
He's not worth waiting for. Get a life woman!
ANGRY
I really don't know what to say about this poem. Perhaps the guy is genuine. Perhaps he does have some pressing responsibilities that he has to carry out. But it's not fair to his lover to have to wait that long for him.
If he's prepared to love her then he must go the whole nine yards and not just give her excuses.
Garry Olsen (Ontario,CANADA)
A sad poem Neneps. The tone itself is very melancholic. The plight of this woman is obvious. The vocabulary used is simple yet it tells the story well. Interesting similie you used for menopause..."womanhood near death". Creative I must say. Jolly good job.
Hubert Hall(London,England)
Oh my goodness. Is there any way these lovers will ever get married? I hope so. Time is their enemy.
Shantha (India)
A very well written poem I must say. The diction used is simple and yet precise. The mood is gloomy. You have written a story in this poem and have projected it well to your readers. Good work.
Christopher(Mauritius)
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